帮我看看我刚写的这篇文章有没有错?明天用Today I will talk about some of a coach,his name is PhilJackson.He was born in 1945.And he is 203cm.He was coach Los Angeles Lakers.He ever coached Chicago Bulls.He was AIR MICHAEL JORDAN's Me

帮我看看我刚写的这篇文章有没有错?明天用Today I will talk about some of a coach,his name is PhilJackson.He was born in 1945.And he is 203cm.He was coach Los Angeles Lakers.He ever coached Chicago Bulls.He was AIR MICHAEL JORDAN's Me
帮我看看我刚写的这篇文章有没有错?明天用
Today I will talk about some of a coach,his name is PhilJackson.
He was born in 1945.And he is 203cm.He was coach Los Angeles Lakers.He ever coached Chicago Bulls.He was AIR MICHAEL JORDAN's Mentor.He also was a basketball palyer when he was young.He was in 1967 2nd turn of 17th is selected by the New York Knicks team; On June 8,1978 he was exchanged the New Jersey net team.

帮我看看我刚写的这篇文章有没有错?明天用Today I will talk about some of a coach,his name is PhilJackson.He was born in 1945.And he is 203cm.He was coach Los Angeles Lakers.He ever coached Chicago Bulls.He was AIR MICHAEL JORDAN's Me
菲尔.杰克逊很伟大,但是你要重点说他培养出的两大巨星,乔丹和科比,以及风靡世界的三角进攻战术.至于他是第二轮第几顺位被选中,由纽约尼克斯交易到新泽西网队,这都不重要.
today i'll talk about PhilJackson.He is a world famous coach ,and have won nine champions in NBA.He trained two superstars,jordan and kobe,which are all symbols of NBA.
He designed and developed triangle tactics,which is a well known skill for basketball players.Now he works as a coach in Lakers,and strives for the tenth champion in his life.

Today I will talk about something of a coach
He is the coach of Los Angeles Lakers.
He was selected by the New York Knicks team in 1967.
2nd turn of 17th 这里不明白你想说什么
On June 8, 1978 he was exchanged to the New Jersey net team.

something about a coach
In 1967 2nd turn of 17th he was selected by the New York Knicks team
he was exchanged to the New Jersey net team

Today I will talk something about a coach.......And he is about 203 cm tall,He was coach of Los Angeles Lakers.He was also a basketball palyer when he was young.......
下面这一句不懂你在说什么，但感觉好象有问题：He was in 1967 2nd turn of 17th is selected by the New York Knicks team

Today I will talk about something about a coach, whose name is PhilJackson
He was born in 1945.And his height is 203cm.
He was the coache of Los Angeles Lakers
He had ever coached Chicag...

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Today I will talk about something about a coach, whose name is PhilJackson
He was born in 1945.And his height is 203cm.
He was the coache of Los Angeles Lakers
He had ever coached Chicago Bulls.He was the AIR--MICHAEL JORDAN's Mentor.
He was also a basketball palyer when he was young.
In the second turn of 17th in 1967 he is selected by the New York Knicks team
On June 8, 1978 he was sent to the New Jersey net team.
大概就是你说的意思吧

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He was coach Los Angeles Lakers,"coah"怎么回事呢?应该是"He coaches Los Angeles Lakers.而且"Today I will talk about some of a coach"虽然语法没错,但一般不这样说,这就是通常说的Chinglish-中国式英语."Today I will talk something about a co...

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He was coach Los Angeles Lakers,"coah"怎么回事呢?应该是"He coaches Los Angeles Lakers.而且"Today I will talk about some of a coach"虽然语法没错,但一般不这样说,这就是通常说的Chinglish-中国式英语."Today I will talk something about a coach"这样比较好."And he is 203cm"最好是"And he is 2.03m tall"而且如果你以后想在这方面有所作为,那么你就得慢慢的接受原汁原味的英语,要生活在一个英语的世界里.一分努力,一分收获,祝你成功!

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Today I will talk about something about a coach,whose name is PhilJackson.PhilJackson,who is the coach of Angeles Lakers,is 203cms and he was born in 1945.He has ever coached Chicago Bulls and he is A...

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Today I will talk about something about a coach,whose name is PhilJackson.PhilJackson,who is the coach of Angeles Lakers,is 203cms and he was born in 1945.He has ever coached Chicago Bulls and he is AIR MICHAEL JORDAN's Mentor.He was also a basketball palyer when he was young.He was selected by the New York Knicks team in the 2nd turn in 1967.On June 8 1978,he was exchanged to the New Jersey net team.

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today I would like to talk about something of a coach，
I will有些生硬，如果整个改成I would like to tell you a story of a coach更好
his name is PhilJackson.He was born in 1945.And he is 203cm tall
（身高2米...

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today I would like to talk about something of a coach，
I will有些生硬，如果整个改成I would like to tell you a story of a coach更好
his name is PhilJackson.He was born in 1945.And he is 203cm tall
（身高2米03后面要加tall）.
He had been a coach of Chicago Bulls
（ever couched）显然不对.
He was Air Jordan's Mentor这句mentor用语有些书面化，飞人乔丹就是air jordan.
He also was a basketball palyer when he was young.He finished second in the NBA Draft
（这一段错误较多，NBA Draft是nba选秀的意思）
and was selected by the New York Knicks team;
这里是过去式
On June 8, 1978 he was exchanged to（交换到新泽西去要有to） the New Jersey net team.
我可是为分而来的哦，绝对认真

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