Help!请英语大神帮忙检查下雅思作文小弟英语菜鸟一枚,刚用了39分钟写了篇雅思英语大作文,来自剑桥9,test2.求大神给检查下.Education had been became a discussion that the whole world focus on it.Nowdaws,there ar

Help!请英语大神帮忙检查下雅思作文小弟英语菜鸟一枚,刚用了39分钟写了篇雅思英语大作文,来自剑桥9,test2.求大神给检查下.Education had been became a discussion that the whole world focus on it.Nowdaws,there ar
Help!请英语大神帮忙检查下雅思作文
小弟英语菜鸟一枚,刚用了39分钟写了篇雅思英语大作文,来自剑桥9,test2.求大神给检查下.
Education had been became a discussion that the whole world focus on it.Nowdaws,there are some advices about hight school students should be imposed participation in unpaid community service.This is a good thing that service to younger children,but i think that people should have enough right to decide thing they want to do by own.
Children aways are a key point for society,and they are lower power than adult,so they need more help by society,especially children who in a diffcult condition such as in poor and violence.Because of this reason,some people want high students to help these children who needing helped.In fact,this action not only contuibute to help those diffcult younger children,but also to develop the student's abilities that dealing with different thing,interacting with other people,cooporating with other individuals.
Participating in this social service is no doubt that would bo benefited to society and individual,but i thing that it should not become a compulsory activity.Every people should have free and right to do the thing they want to do,and this activity should be decided weather wanting help other people by themselves,but is imposed by any one or any institution.
Overall,my own opinion is that alrough the unpaid community service is benefitd for society and individual,but if people want to do should be depended on a person's own will.Because the right and free of people is very important thing to our life

Help!请英语大神帮忙检查下雅思作文小弟英语菜鸟一枚,刚用了39分钟写了篇雅思英语大作文,来自剑桥9,test2.求大神给检查下.Education had been became a discussion that the whole world focus on it.Nowdaws,there ar
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